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You don't care
What I do,
You don't care
What I feel.

All you care
About is how
To turn me
Into the thing,
Which does
Everything you
Say, without
Objections.

How to turn
Me into the
Thing, which
Agrees with
Your every
Opinion, without
Objections.

Will you care
About what
I do,
About what
I feel,
When I'll be
Gone?
I was sitting in my chair when these words appeared in my mind and I haven't experienced this. I just write what comes in my mind.

Do not upload it on other sites without a link to my profile!
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Fourthebetter Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Now you've turned the faucet,
And it won't ever stop,
Bleeding into reality,
Through every block,
It will quietly run on.
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SinRedemption Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That's impressing.
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Fourthebetter Featured By Owner Edited Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe, yet so is this.
This, of words, a list.

(Also the first comment is about how you've now reached the writer's point of just writing.  Flowing. Growing.
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SinRedemption Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
And yet there is still much to do to improve my writing.

Thank you.
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Fourthebetter Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
But you've still grown so much.
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SinRedemption Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! Blush emoticon Blush emoticon 
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Fourthebetter Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome.
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SinRedemption Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:) (Smile) Hug 
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TheIce-Sorceress Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
This is beautiful :)

Nice work
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SinRedemption Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! Blush emoticon :) (Smile) 
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TheIce-Sorceress Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
not a problem ^_^
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SinRedemption Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:) (Smile) 
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Riamorr-Welenth Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What made you write this?
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SinRedemption Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't know. Like I wroted in description I was sitting in my chair when these words appeared in my mind and I haven't experienced this. It always happens with me. I just write what comes in my mind.
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Riamorr-Welenth Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's how a lot of poetry goes I suppose. It's just sometimes people can have half an idea and have it in their head for ages, but whatever suits you.
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SinRedemption Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! Blush emoticon :) (Smile) 
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Riamorr-Welenth Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's fine!
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SinRedemption Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:) (Smile) 
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